SAT寫作真題批改實(shí)例講解參考
SAT學(xué)生習(xí)作修改:Is it necessary to question the authority?
分析:本文是2006年10月考題,先根據(jù)題目做思維練習(xí)。
本文作者寫的是黑人爭奪民權(quán),就此考慮文章中要細(xì)化的內(nèi)容。
Authority--- who? 本文是the white people
Question the authority--- why? (因?yàn)榘兹似圬?fù)黑人太甚了) How? (開會(huì),選領(lǐng)導(dǎo),搞抗議)
Result ---(廢除了公共汽車法)
學(xué)生文章分析
開頭段:
1Every person makes mistakes, as well as the authority. 2Thats why it is important to insist your own idea when authority is wrong. 3Development of peoples society is usually associated with challenging the authority.
問題:句一太松散;句二詞組誤用,缺定冠詞;句三和句二之間有些跳躍,意思上理解應(yīng)該是挑戰(zhàn)權(quán)威的'結(jié)果;首段缺少明確的觀點(diǎn)和對(duì)下文的提示。
修改:1 I cannot agree more with the saying, 2for the authority, like common people, are likely to make mistakes or act unreasonably on some occasions. 3At that moment, the public is supposed to, at the risk of offending the authority, insist on his own belief for the further development of the society. 4Next I will take the example of __Rosa Park_____ to illustrate/substantiate my point.
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